Proposal Writer – DriveWyze

Please consider me in your search for a Business Proposal Writer.

After completing my Education degree at the U of A (while also serving as a writer/production editor for the Students’ Union Gateway) I joined The University of Calgary as a Communications Officer II. In this position, I worked with university administrators to develop and deliver communications messages to positively impact students, staff, faculty and the public. As co-editor of the bi-weekly Gazette I produced news and feature articles. My article on digital mapping and my profile of Beatrice Medicine are two examples. I was also called upon to provide photography, illustration and design skills in support of these efforts.

After almost five years with the U of C, I accepted a position as a Journalism Instructor at the then Grant MacEwan Community College and worked with students to help them develop there writing, editing, design and photography skills. Preferring to “do rather than to teach,” I joined Canadian Forest Industries Magazine, in Vancouver. As Western Editor, I provided copy on all aspects of the business including harvesting, safety and milling. I then settled with my family in Nanaimo where I worked as a weekly and daily reporter for The Nanaimo Business Examiner and Nanaimo Daily Free Press. Samples articles include stories on a submersible camera and Sam Struhar’s battle with WCB, respectively. I also spent five years running my own Val-Pak direct-mail advertising franchise; selling, delivering and analyzing marketing campaigns for a variety of businesses.

I then joined forest equipment manufacturer T-MAR Industries in Campbell River as the company’s Marketing Manager. Part of my B2B duties included conducting customer surveys; producing advertising copy, brochures and videos, and launching the company’s newsletter, The T-MAR Times

A downturn in the industry led to leave T-MAR and spend 10 years overseas teaching in Libya, Mongolia, Saudi Arabia, Norway, the UAE and Japan. I developed instructional and assessment materials for a variety of curricula and also co-authored mathematics workbooks for vocational students in the UAE.

Returning to Canada in 2012, I relocated to Prince George, BC and served in a variety of positions including a Community Care Aide and studied with the Sauder School of Business at UBC to become a Licensed Property Manager.

As an artist, I launched my WordPress website (I have a working knowledge of WordPress, MS Office, Illustrator, Photoshop and Movie Studio) to highlight my creative abilities in writing, photography, art, music and video production and secured a number of art commissions including a large outdoor installation, The Spirit of Prince George, 2015, for Timberspan Wood Products. I’ve written a number of proposals for art commissions, including a design for a Commemorative Centennial Spire for the City of Prince George, posted in parts one and two on my website and was a Team Leader for a submission to design a Holocaust Memorial in Ottawa.

That’s an impressive and extensive list of company values. Let me take you at your word and offer what I hope you will consider “constructive feedback.”

You state, “DriveWyze, is disrupting the commercial trucking industry by delivering unsurpassed time-saving and cost-effective driving solutions to commercial vehicle operators and carriers across North America.” I believe I know what you are getting at but suggest disrupting is found in more negative references than positive.

Let me suggest an alternative lead statement and hook:

DriveWyze offers unsurpassed operational savings to commercial vehicle operators and carriers across North America.

In the next paragraph you state, “We are looking for a driven, customer-centric, self-starter who understands how well-executed operations drive revenue in a SaaS organization. As a builder and systems-thinker, you thrive in creating cohesion through streamlining processes and developing new programs that have a high impact on the business.”

To which I ask, “Is this really part of the role of the position you want to fill?” It doesn’t sound like it to me. But if it is part of the job, why isn’t it included in the job-description that follows?

Your advertisement has a number of typographical errors:

You are looking for an “exceptional writer who takes provide in crafting and positioning messages.” I’m sure you mean pride.

Identify should replace “identifies” in “Review RFPs to identifies response deliverables and establish submission schedules and requirements.”

The introduction to your list of values, which states “Although technically, we have been in business for over 15 years, we are proud to have maintained a start-up feel with each team member acting like owners modeling our values:” should begin, “Although, technically, …” but I suggest it could be simplified to:

“We’ve been in business for over 15 years but have maintained our start-up feel with each team member encouraged to model our values:”

I like your identified values but, again, would suggest you avoid the use of the word disrupt. Instead of “Disrupt Creatively,” which is almost an oxymoron, I like the statement found within the value, “foster innovation” and suggest that would be a more positive lead. I would change, “Merit ideas, not titles, and learn from failure,” to “Merit ideas and learn from failure.”

I think I have some sense of what you mean when you state, “Don’t iterate when you can change the game,” but would suggest you could probably remove it.

Finally, let me rewrite your About Us as provided in your advertisement.

DriveWyze, and its parent company, Intelligent Imaging Systems Inc. (IIS), offer unsurpassed operational savings to commercial vehicle operators and carriers across North America. We’re on a mission to revolutionize the delivery of highway safety and transportation management by supplying the most advanced commercial vehicle inspection and safety systems available today. We also work with transportation and law enforcement agencies in their efforts to monitor and improve transportation safety and security.

Another one of your values says, “take risks and aim high” and I’ve done that in this letter of application. Like DriveWyze, I am looking for a way to stand out and be noticed by my customers. In my case, my customer is you. I hope my resume, samples of my work and this letter inspire you to consider and interview me for this position. To that end, I suggest we meet to discuss the contribution I could make to your organization.